Here is another example of a simple error of omission that could have been caught if the student had read the essay aloud or given it to a friend to read. The word "of" should be between "calculation" and "the." That one small error makes the entire sentence awkward and confusing. If the instructor has to reread the sentence to try to understand its meaning, the flow of the essay is interrupted. If this happens often enough in the essay, it gives an overall bad impression on what otherwise might be a very good paper in terms of research.
Question) Despite a variety of sport facilities and gyms, people are less fit nowadays than ever do you think are the main causes of this problem? What solutions can you suggest?
Nowadays, sport facilities like gym are everywhere, people can have more chances to keep fit. However, it is undoubtedly that obesity is becoming serious than before. In this essay, i will explain the causes of the problem, and giving suggestions.
With the advent of the technology, people start to become more convenient, but more lazy. Living in the computer age, it is so simple to do anything that you example, we can go to somewhere very easy, find someone that you want, or even have a quick meal. It seems help us a lot, but instead it makes us become dependence on it. When people start to rely on those gadgets, they will start to become lazy and don’t want to do anything. For instance, no willing to walk, move or go outside. Which may makes people have less exercise, and stay in the house all day, become overweight eventually.
The conclusion is written in one paragraph and its main purpose is to sum up the arguments of the essay, which the author revealed in the topic sentences of the body paragraphs. It summarizes the evidence in support for the thesis statement of the essay and if proved restates this statement. It is a final glance at the presented facts, which lead to a certain conclusion on the essay matter.
The conclusion does not have a set structure and can be written according to the peculiarities of the essay but must always have the mentioned above argument summary analysis.